Kamis, 10 Maret 2016




Holla !! I have  a story about important event on my life .. check it .



            When I was child, I always imagine to be a soldier. I would like to watching serial movies about war, Indonesian army and many more. That is very cool, imagine that you took a big weapon to serve your nation. On this era, to be a Indonesian Army is so good chance. Last year I tried to take the test to be a soldier, it’s too hard you know ? there is a lot of test, for example : body test, I must run around the football field and I just given 1 minute for run around the field. After that, push up, pull up and wall climb for body balance is a second test.
                Many friends were give up because this test, but not me. I thought  that. I will not pass the test. Some of my friends who took this test is have bigger body than me. They did not pass the test. They were very sad. I felt that too. That is too hard, because before the test we must took many file from Police department to show that we have not doing a criminal activities. My father have spend a lot of his money for this test.
Finally ! I failed on psychology test, but it is okay, I can try next year. My trainer named Sergeant Moch. Andi  said that “you will be a good army next year, keep trying on another way like Police academy, Indonesian Navy, you can do that, kid. Your parents will proud to you. I swear.” at the moment he said that, I felt so strong, really. Mr. Andy always support me to do better than before. He is a real soldier. He is like my father who always support with their way.



How about my important event guys ? and how about yours ?

3 komentar:

  1. An army huh? That sounds pretty cool! It is okay, fails should not stop you. Hope you can pass this year, but what about your study? Well, you have got such an interesting story Tyo. Unfortunately, I think you still have to improve your grammar more and the tenses. For example, you should have said “Many of my friends gave up” instead of “Many friends were give up”. Good luck for those tests this year! All the best for you. 

    BalasHapus
  2. Hi Tio. Your story is inspired. You should follow your dream. If you want to become a soldier you should working on it and you will become the great one. You wrote the good opening that make the reader feel like reading. Your grammar is correct too. Keep the spirit and never give up.

    BalasHapus
  3. Keep trying and believe that you can achieve it! Quite a good story,though. However, you should pay more attention to the grammar such as tenses, article and to-infinitive. For example in this sentence "When I was child", it is lack of the article so you should put "a" before the word "child" and then the sentence "I would like to watching" , you should revise it with "I would like to watch". It is better if you prepare and study more about grammar. Good luck for the midterm test!

    BalasHapus