Holla !! I have a
story about important event on my life .. check it .
When I was
child, I always imagine to be a soldier. I would like to watching serial movies
about war, Indonesian army and many more. That is very cool, imagine that you
took a big weapon to serve your nation. On this era, to be a Indonesian Army is
so good chance. Last year I tried to take the test to be a soldier, it’s too
hard you know ? there is a lot of test, for example : body test, I must run
around the football field and I just given 1 minute for run around the field.
After that, push up, pull up and wall climb for body balance is a second test.
Many
friends were give up because this test, but not me. I thought that. I will not pass the test. Some of my
friends who took this test is have bigger body than me. They did not pass the
test. They were very sad. I felt that too. That is too hard, because before the
test we must took many file from Police department to show that we have not
doing a criminal activities. My father have spend a lot of his money for this
test.
Finally ! I failed on psychology
test, but it is okay, I can try next year. My trainer named Sergeant Moch.
Andi said that “you will be a good army
next year, keep trying on another way like Police academy, Indonesian Navy, you
can do that, kid. Your parents will proud to you. I swear.” at the moment he
said that, I felt so strong, really. Mr. Andy always support me to do better
than before. He is a real soldier. He is like my father who always support with
their way.
How about my important event guys ? and how about yours ?
An army huh? That sounds pretty cool! It is okay, fails should not stop you. Hope you can pass this year, but what about your study? Well, you have got such an interesting story Tyo. Unfortunately, I think you still have to improve your grammar more and the tenses. For example, you should have said “Many of my friends gave up” instead of “Many friends were give up”. Good luck for those tests this year! All the best for you.
BalasHapusHi Tio. Your story is inspired. You should follow your dream. If you want to become a soldier you should working on it and you will become the great one. You wrote the good opening that make the reader feel like reading. Your grammar is correct too. Keep the spirit and never give up.
BalasHapusKeep trying and believe that you can achieve it! Quite a good story,though. However, you should pay more attention to the grammar such as tenses, article and to-infinitive. For example in this sentence "When I was child", it is lack of the article so you should put "a" before the word "child" and then the sentence "I would like to watching" , you should revise it with "I would like to watch". It is better if you prepare and study more about grammar. Good luck for the midterm test!
BalasHapus